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Could someone here look this over and tell me if you see any really big mistakes. I'm writing this article for a contest in the paper. All I'm really worried about is big mistakes. Thanks.
History; it’s required that students learn no matter how boring the class. For some, we loved it and were given an opportunity to witness two of the most history rich places on Earth.
Almost two years ago, my ninth grade history teacher asked his classes if they wanted to see Greece and Italy. Hands shot up into the air as he mentioned the things we would see: The Roman Colosseum; the Parthenon; the Pantheon; the Roman Forum; and the Sistine Chapel. My hand was one of several that rose in the air; one way or another, I was going.
Finally, after all the planning, our departure date arrived and we climbed aboard a Boeing 747 to fly to Frankfurt, Germany. We then missed our connecting flight due to inclement weather, and then arrived in Greece at the late hour of midnight.
The next day our traveling began, and after our trip was done I knew that my highlight was Delphi, which sits atop a mountain in central Greece. While en route to Delphi, I became carsick and began throwing up; however, I battled through and arrived at the top. The view took my breath away; all I could see was green lushness which was absolutely beautiful.
In the end, this traveling brought about homesickness for each and every one of us; some more strong then others. For myself, I just wanted to know I was in America with all the freedoms men and women have so valiantly died protecting.
EDIT: Deadline is August 12th. Thanks again.
History; it’s required that students learn no matter how boring the class. For some, we loved it and were given an opportunity to witness two of the most history rich places on Earth.
Almost two years ago, my ninth grade history teacher asked his classes if they wanted to see Greece and Italy. Hands shot up into the air as he mentioned the things we would see: The Roman Colosseum; the Parthenon; the Pantheon; the Roman Forum; and the Sistine Chapel. My hand was one of several that rose in the air; one way or another, I was going.
Finally, after all the planning, our departure date arrived and we climbed aboard a Boeing 747 to fly to Frankfurt, Germany. We then missed our connecting flight due to inclement weather, and then arrived in Greece at the late hour of midnight.
The next day our traveling began, and after our trip was done I knew that my highlight was Delphi, which sits atop a mountain in central Greece. While en route to Delphi, I became carsick and began throwing up; however, I battled through and arrived at the top. The view took my breath away; all I could see was green lushness which was absolutely beautiful.
In the end, this traveling brought about homesickness for each and every one of us; some more strong then others. For myself, I just wanted to know I was in America with all the freedoms men and women have so valiantly died protecting.
EDIT: Deadline is August 12th. Thanks again.
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"This is that human freedom, which all boast that they possess, and which consists solely in the fact, that men are conscious of their own desire, but are ignorant of the causes whereby that desire has been determined." -Baruch Spinoza
"This is that human freedom, which all boast that they possess, and which consists solely in the fact, that men are conscious of their own desire, but are ignorant of the causes whereby that desire has been determined." -Baruch Spinoza
Last edited by John McClane; 07-31-05 at 07:42 PM.
I would cut out "into the air" don't need it.
s on the paper. Sending it in now.
Lol. 
