Killer's Triangle- A story that I wrote

[MovieMaker5087]

Killer's Triangle (http://www.fictionpress.com/read.php?storyid=1892292)

I really don't feel like writing up a synopsis for fear of giving away anything, but it's basically about a killer who brutally rapes and murders his victims, and then one day he cleverly picks and chooses three new victims to stalk and hopefully kill. And there's one thing about this killer that seperates him from all the rest...

The Author's Note is deep and true, and if you do have any questions, comments, or concerns, just email me, drop a PM, or just post it in this thread. As for reviews, follow the same guidelines.

Hope you all enjoy it.

[The Taxi Driver]

sounds interesting Seth. dont really have time you read it now but i will eventually get around to it. just a question how long did it take you to right the whole thing?

[MovieMaker5087]

sounds interesting Seth. dont really have time you read it now but i will eventually get around to it. just a question how long did it take you to right the whole thing?

I beleive I started writing it back in October, then took a break from it, writing from here and there. It was just until this past weekend that I was in a writing mood, and I re-discovered this story. After reading some teacher's notes on it (I let my English teacher read what I had typed up of it), I decided to continue on with it, this time expanding this one-shot deal story to a full length trilogy with a twist at the end. Heck, I'm still trying to figure out the end... give me time... just give me time...

[OG-]

Honesty is the best policy, so...

First up, that note in the begining. Get rid of that. You give yourself way too much credit, as if this story is going to change someone's life. Way too contrieved.

As for the actual story. I was surprised at how strong some of the writing was. There were little bits here and there that I actually really, really liked:

"“I know.” A two word rebuttal."
"So long, Stace. The French kisses were out of this world."

The story was pretty cool at times, but was very anticlimactic. What was the point of the whole thing. I think stories, any stories, should either show you something you've never seen or make you think about the story in context with your own life. But neither of those happen here. Sure, the plot of it may be fairly original, but what's the point of it? Just to end?

Not to crap all over it, it's not horrible, and I was surprised at how strong it was at times - so much so that I doubted you even wrote it (no offense), but I found it to be rather fruitless. It's a good first step, but like you said yourself, the ending needs work.

[Uncle Rico]

Very good Big Guy

[MovieMaker5087]

The story was pretty cool at times, but was very anticlimactic. What was the point of the whole thing. I think stories, any stories, should either show you something you've never seen or make you think about the story in context with your own life. But neither of those happen here. Sure, the plot of it may be fairly original, but what's the point of it? Just to end?

This is part one of a trilogy. Just to clear up the confusion.

[Sexy Celebrity]

Stacey’s beautiful face was no more. Lodged in it now was a small hatchet, thrown at an angle so that part of the skull broke open, splattering brains and blood everywhere. If I was a horny zombie, this would be my day.
That was funny.

[The Taxi Driver]

Finally finished reading it Seth. i had fun reading this and that means alot coming from me because i hate reading. cant wait to see the other two parts of the story

[MovieMaker5087]

I just started writing Part Two today. It's called The Allegeable’s.